"Heaven & Sky"

Exercise #92 : "Heaven and Sky"

John McGahern, the Irish writer, recently died. In yesterday's Washington Post there was an interesting obituary written by Matt Shudel, which ends thus:
"Mr. McGahern composed his final book, the memoir evoking the spirit of his long-dead mother, after receiving his own cancer diagnosis. 'Heaven was in the sky,' he wrote in the book. 'My mother spoke to me of heaven as concretely and with as much love as she named the wild flowers. Above us the sun of heaven shone. Beyond the sun was the gate of heaven.'"
This is so marvelous, I scarcely dare to comment -- but here goes. What gives this passage such power is the drum-beat of repetition. Heaven is repeated four times; sun twice. Also, the structure and length of the last two sentences are almost identical.
Try writing a brief passage -- 4-5 sentences -- using repetition.

Well, folks, I'm REALLY behind on NaNo, so this is it for today's exercise. I'm hoping to be back up to where I need to be at the end of the weekend. Posting should resume as normal on Monday.

Peace.
Stef.

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